"譯場（su）報告"No.38

"譯場（su）報告" * On Translating *
No.38, 2008年3月9日； 2008/1/28 創刊

上期"譯場（su）報告" * On Translating * No. 37 中

rl 找出全詩：我三言兩語地把它給翻了
請不吝指教：http://blog.xuite.net/rwaylin/poesie/16111152
Luck is not chance -
It's Toil -
Fortune's expensive smile
Is earned -
The Father of the Mine
Is that old-fashioned Coin
We spurned -
--Emily DICKINSON

yl：欲贏得幸運女神千金一笑，需胼手胝足

hc；這首我早上赴喜宴之前匆匆上線
如果我找全詩一讀 可能更難下筆
一種解釋是後半部完全否定讀者文摘選的部分
源頭還是機率

討論：就自由日報一段編譯：
參考 worst case scenario, crowns and dentures

「但安全性還是最大隱憂。國家牙科實驗室協會董事史密斯表示，美國的問題就在於進口管制越來越鬆，「鬆到連巴士都可以闖關」。此外，英國嚴格管制醫療器材，但補牙材料規範卻鬆得多；原料本身雖然有ＣＥ規章管制，但歐盟以外廠商，卻無法可管。」

相關原文："In theory what happened in America should never happen here as there are regulatory bodies which should prevent these problems in the UK.

"But the truth is, if the situation isn't addressed then it is only a matter of time before there is a similar case as in the States. We've watered down all the rules in such a way that you could drive a bus through them.

評：這編譯把英國搞錯成美國

請教su朋友：我的問題是 ：末句之表示。 應該是規則鬆到無以復加。 "巴士"是比喻。

RL給一哲理：「過去的way是narrowband是小徑羊腸
現在的way是wideband變成十里洋場」

PR先用”loose and wide”說明，再更正：「rules watered down are no longer "tight", so loose and wide between the rules that a bus could be driven through in the space between the now loose and "wide-spaced" rules.

（順便問了GOOGLE姑姑, 有各式各樣 a bus could drive through 的玩意呢）」

讀 1992年7月的讀者文摘 中英對照 The Honest Merchant of Herat

開頭an indefatigable smile 翻譯為：「面帶不屈不撓的笑容」

末段 spent four ingenious days persuading me to buy them.「花了四天、用盡辦法說服我買下」 　

感想：「用盡辦法」當然是 ingenious 之解釋；不過中文很少用「不屈不撓的笑容」，這比較難想像。